tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post5452146181855744687..comments2023-03-25T13:17:51.322+00:00Comments on back to the machine gun: Little 1 .back to the machine gunhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07636026708208373064noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-61445133997184940432008-10-26T16:52:00.000+00:002008-10-26T16:52:00.000+00:00it seems I managed to make it better?that is what ...it seems I managed to make it better?<BR/><BR/>that is what I feel, 2 years from thenMALALEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04563118805586951514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-49654343642093717462006-11-27T00:08:00.000+00:002006-11-27T00:08:00.000+00:00OK. I am going to alter this poem, in real time, ...OK. I am going to alter this poem, in real time, like some sort of stripper. Here is what it was:<br /><br /><i> rain falls <br /> dreams <br /><br /> of good <br /> <br /> and bad<br /><br /> parents </i><br /><br />and now I shall make it what it shall becomeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-14206697704542537042006-11-26T22:52:00.000+00:002006-11-26T22:52:00.000+00:00This is fantastic stuff...Im enjoying the updates....This is fantastic stuff...Im enjoying the updates...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-47134181252755999382006-11-26T21:06:00.000+00:002006-11-26T21:06:00.000+00:00i think it was going to be falls/ dreams so that...<i><br />i think it was going to be falls/ dreams so that is two verbs I suppose .<br /><br /> this is a place to be pernickety, mr kevins per mile, so carry on.<br /><br />but what about the studies or giggles at ? </i>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-3621939826939992572006-11-26T21:04:00.000+00:002006-11-26T21:04:00.000+00:00sorry, i meant to say
"rain-fall
dreams...sorry, i meant to say<br /><br />"rain-fall<br /> dreams"<br /><br />but perhaps this is getting a bit pernickety, i will try and stick to useful comments, your grammar is your own... and as you said, irrelavant here.k.p.mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05883927761021274898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-6965826361640516962006-11-26T21:00:00.000+00:002006-11-26T21:00:00.000+00:00pluralise dream?pluralise dream?k.p.mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05883927761021274898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-75369933262761526252006-11-26T20:27:00.000+00:002006-11-26T20:27:00.000+00:00grammar is irrelevant here. I agree on rain-fall,...grammar is irrelevant here. I agree on rain-fall, I will alterate it later if that is allowedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-10917727392386347942006-11-26T20:16:00.000+00:002006-11-26T20:16:00.000+00:00rain-falls of good and bad dreams?
i reckon hyphe...rain-falls of good and bad dreams?<br /><br />i reckon hyphenate to make rainfalls an object in and of itself rather than rain which is doing something by falling, is this how grammar works or have i made that upk.p.mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05883927761021274898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4788648569153883152.post-39897504420680610282006-11-26T16:43:00.000+00:002006-11-26T16:43:00.000+00:00maybe it should be "rain fall"
or "rain-fall" ...<i><br />maybe it should be "rain fall"<br /><br /> or "rain-fall" and dreams could be replaced with "studies", or "giggles at"<br /><br /> "giggles at" ?<br /><br /> well, it was just a thing to you know . </i>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com